ISMAEL SILVA I5v5i315 said... Some times I have (proplems) PROBLEMS to choose a career because I have many options. I do some assessment tests and all THE (test) TESTS give me the same result: I am better working with numbers. I think that I would work with (busness)BUSINESS in a company using a computer but all THE members of my family HAVE already (give) GIVEN me an idea for a job and it's (make) MAKING me more (confuse) CONFUSED. In this moment I don't have idea about what I am going to do but I have more two years to choose.
November 2, 2009 2:33 PM
Hi Ismael. Thank you for the participation. I think you should have elaborated more about your personality, preferences etc following the video.
(hi)HI (professor) TEACHER. My plans for COLLEGE after graduating from high school (to college) (was) WOULD BE international relations, and I (wanted) WOULD LIKE to be a diplomat or AN ambassador, but it would take too long to happen and it (was) IS very difficult. So my new plan is that after high school I will go to engineering college, because I like numbers and calculations and get along very well with Mathematics and Physics, this was also one of the reasons for switching power, international relations (with moves materials of human and I don't like ?). After doing engineering I still want to do international relations. William I5V5I315
October 31, 2009 6:01 AM
Hi William. Thanks for the participation. I think you´ve followed some of the steps in the video. In some parts it´s a bit difficult to understand what you mean.
I want to be a doctor, because I like to help people, and the poor people need the doctors, AND THE POLICE (polices) very much. TO (And) restore PEOPLE´S health (with the other person), IS (it's) very good, (this) that ('s) MAKES me feel much better in the morning when I wake up! Of course I HAVE (has) to study very much, but when I FINISH (finished) and start helpING people, in that moment I´LL (gone) be the HAPPIEST person (more happy of) IN the world. And the faces?, (the smile faces with) the mother´S SMILLING FACE when HER (your) child is heatlhy again, there's (nothing) NO money or work to pay this!
Well, THAT´S WHY ( for this) I´LL (go to) be a doctor one day!
(So) At this moment I don´t know what I will BE in the future, but I think about this all the time. I was thinking about journalism, but I AM NOT SURE. (don´t have certainly.) I think (too,) that I will be a scientist , TOO. it´s so hard, but not impossible, I dream so much, well this is my big dream. I listen TO many peoples about the future and I don´t have a conclusion. When I (i) was 7 I thought I WAS GOING TO (will) be an actor, but MY (may) tastes changed. I wanted to be an actor because I saw (the peoples)PEOPLE on TV and I wanted TO BE THERE, (stay) too. This subject ABOUT (abour) the future is a topic that we have to think ABOUT VERY (so) much. The (the) future is one part of the life, we have to prepare the future in the present...
All the children have a dream that when they grow up they want to be a professional. Some people want to be a teacher and others want to be a pilot, and I have wanted to be a doctor because I have thought it INTERESTING (interisting) and gratifying the helpful idea of helpING people. I want to FOLLOW a CAREER (carrer) that I LIKE (liked) because there are people that aren´t happy with THEIR (them) jobS and BECOME (became) frustrated people.
As any person, I’m CONFUSED (confunsing) about what I (i) Will be. I think that In the beginning of careers which you want to follow is so difficult but this happens because, sometimes, a person DOESN´T (don’t) have ANY (none) idea about THEY WANT (wants) to be. For me It’s a little different because I dream I’ll be an actress, lawyer or a businesswoman. I try to search a lot of places THAT (who) can help me to understand more about THESE (this) professions but I don’t have (too) much time to search this because I study everyday and I get to have a time (need to have time) to do this. There are some things (which I think that it won’t leave to ?) , but other times I think that I can get it. But I believe that these are the careers that I want to follow and nothing can upset it. But I think that My head will change, cause I’ll learn a lot of new things that I’ll be able to be or not (to exercise). So, I just wanted to say this Bye :)
choosing a career is very difficult, because the right ONE is closer than I think. (I don't know exactly the career that I can now think of many but not choose ( ? ). In my opinion people should not choose a career just for the salary (and not like) WITHOUT LIKING the career that THEY will follow, for this choice is for all your life. I want to pick a career that's something I enjoy and that doesn't have a lot of math, I finally have some time for me to decide.
Hi teacher. I want to be an architect because it is a very interesting profession. I like math, geometry and design, and architecture is a course that CONSISTS OF (engobla) all these matters, so interesting. If I WON´T BE ABLE TO (can not) pass the entrance exam for architecture, I plan to do journalism. As well as being my second choice, I also think IT IS a very interesting course.
I have problems in CHOOSING (choose) my career because I want one career that is nice but I have many opinion (?). but this moment I need TO choose fast because I will do the Pas and I need to decide. (But) I think ABOUT (in) doING LANGUAGES (letters in English) because I want TO master this language that I have A LOT OF (many) difficult in learnING. (also I don’t like this language so I don’t if I’ll fallow this profession (?)). I think ABOUT studying ENGLISH (letters in English) to work as a translator because it’s very interesting but all this is for me TO improve my English.
I have ALREADY (alredy) chosen (the) my professional life and It's very difficulty to choose, futhermore (?) the life giveS me a lot of opportunity. When I was a child I likeD to play soccer but my mon put me to practice Taekwando. However I didn't like to practice IT very much. My big passion was soccer soon I changed my mind because, It's very difFicult (y) to be a SOCCER player. So I chose to learn English, finishing my (course of) computer COURSE and to do University Entrace Exam. One day I would like to teach Taekwando for children (s), this is my hobbi.
I'm sorry but I don't have any idea about what I'm going to do when I finish high school. I'm an INDECISIVE (undecided) girl. When I was a child, I had decided to do something like teachING, singING and dancING, I wanted to be a policewoman or firefighter and pilot of motocycle, but my mother talked me out of it. Nowadays I DON´T (didn't) like to teach, dance, sing or want to be a policewoman or firefighter, cause I grew up and my tastes changed, but pilot of motocycle I want to be, although my mother desagree with me. I have many ABILITIES (habilits) : I like to take photos of (the) people, animals and LANDSCAPES (the paradises), I like to make videos, to listen To music and travel. I'd like to learn TO play (ing) the guitar or another instrument. I don't know exactly what is the BEST (better) for me. For example, I'd like to do medicine(pediatrics or obstetrics) cause I like children (s), veterinary, medicinE, biology, psychology, or tourism. I'm afraid to make the wrong choice. Find and choose a career is dificult, but I know how this is important for my future, however, I'm confused!
Choosing a profession is not easy, it takes great responsibility (to) not TO waste time and money. I always wanted to be a psychologist, because I like to listen to people and be able to help them. Understanding a little about human behavior would do me good. Despite (ease of)I GET mathS WITH EASE, I do not like numbers, in my aptitude tests results are always human sciences. I want to go abroad to learn more English and do some specialty courses, perhaps I live it for some time to gain (esperinecia) professional EXPERIENCE (goals).
This lesson is going to be so easy for me, because in every moment of my life I'm thinking (in) ABOUT my LIFE, every time, even (I'm) in the present, I think (in) OF my future! I had already decided my GRADUATION COURSE (graduate) when I saw this video. In the last two weeks I was very worried and confused about my career, my field, my tastes, if I am GOING TO (gonna) be very happy or simply SATISFIED (satisfacted) with myself, so I had started to pray, to ask the God's decision (since 2007, I´VE always beEN very anxious), I knew what God decided (in my life) I would meet IN MY LIFE. And I was very confused about two GRADUATION COURSES (graduates): Medicine or Music! Music: because I love (so much) music VERY MUCH, I play keyboardS and it's generally present in my life! And Medicine - Pediatrics, First: because it gives money! Second: because I enjoy laboratories, formulas, Math, help others, CHEMISTRY (chemical), I love children and I want to make the difference tHrough my occupation. I had already researched other occupations and most of them I had disagreed WITH (given?). I don't like (to) law, even design or teachING! And I continued to pray, then one week before that video's class I had a dream where God sent to me... To Be A DOCTOR!! I woke up scared but not afraid I could not beliEve that God was speaking to me in dream, that way, and if it were true? And IF it was only God? And if it was just a dream? When I woke up I started to pray again and I felt a calmness that I had never felt BEFORE (yet)!! And IT continues, continues... And nowadays I ('m fell) FEEL very sure about my future, my career, my tastes, and I am not the same! Now I know that Medicine is the BEST (better) for my life, so the video will not help me because I am sure!! But this movie made me (a reflection) THINK again, because it is very good, it helps and clears the vision (the) all of us have about the future, money and occupation!
Choosing a career is very difficult but I had already decided my GRADUATION COURSE. I will do international affairs school. I want to work sitting on desk. I like to read, write and resolve problems. Well this is my big dream. I Know it is very hard. I need to study a lot. And I will have one way. I will work to government (I was 15 year old.?) I was going to be teacher, but it’s hard to make a living as A teacher I (i) like teachING adultS How to read. I should have applied to teachING school. I could be happy Maybe it is not too late(r). I (i) think I (i) will be able to GO TO (make) teachING school after international affairs school.
OK Aline, your composition is here. Attention to the corrections. Some parts are unclear.
November 20, 2009 5:11 AM
JÉSSICA GABRIELA
For me it's very important the CHOICE OF (choose about) profession because it's a CHOICE (choose) FOR (to) all the life. When A (the) person MAKE (made) the CHOICE choose OF (about) a profession she OR HE has TO (that) to strive VERY much to be a good professional and give the BEST better AS (how) A professional. Then I want (a) TO work WITH SOMETHING (of a thing) that I like,I was going to study social comunication but I changeD my mind because I don't have the necessary characteristic to that. Now I think ABOUT GOING TO (study) LAW (lawyer) school because I want TO be a judge, it's good because the salary is high (t) , it's a important professional and I want TO work with justice,but it's a difficult(y) work and dangerous too.
Jéssica, although you´re late, you´re composition is here. Attention to corrections.
ISMAEL SILVA I5v5i315 said...
ReplyDeleteSome times I have (proplems) PROBLEMS to choose a career because I have many options. I do some assessment tests and all THE (test) TESTS give me the same result: I am better working with numbers.
I think that I would work with (busness)BUSINESS in a company using a computer but all THE members of my family HAVE already (give) GIVEN me an idea for a job and it's (make) MAKING me more (confuse) CONFUSED.
In this moment I don't have idea about what I am going to do but I have more two years to choose.
November 2, 2009 2:33 PM
Hi Ismael. Thank you for the participation. I think you should have elaborated more about your personality, preferences etc following the video.
WILLIAM
ReplyDelete(hi)HI (professor) TEACHER. My plans for COLLEGE after graduating from high school (to college) (was) WOULD BE international relations, and I (wanted) WOULD LIKE to be a diplomat or AN ambassador, but it would take too long to happen and it (was) IS very difficult. So my new plan is that after high school I will go to engineering college, because I like numbers and calculations and get along very well with Mathematics and Physics, this was also one of the reasons for switching power, international relations (with moves materials of human and I don't like ?). After doing engineering I still want to do international relations.
William I5V5I315
October 31, 2009 6:01 AM
Hi William. Thanks for the participation. I think you´ve followed some of the steps in the video. In some parts it´s a bit difficult to understand what you mean.
Hello Teacher
ReplyDeleteI want to be a doctor, because I like to help people, and the poor people need the doctors, AND THE POLICE (polices) very much. TO (And) restore PEOPLE´S health (with the other person), IS (it's) very good, (this) that ('s) MAKES me feel much better in the morning when I wake up!
Of course I HAVE (has) to study very much, but when I FINISH (finished) and start helpING people, in that moment I´LL (gone) be the HAPPIEST person (more happy of) IN the world. And the faces?, (the smile faces with) the mother´S SMILLING FACE when HER (your) child is heatlhy again, there's (nothing) NO money or work to pay this!
Well, THAT´S WHY ( for this) I´LL (go to) be a doctor one day!
Victor I5V5I315
Ok, Victor, your composition is here with the corrections in capital letters. Very well.
ReplyDeleteHi, Luiz, thanks for following my blog and here is your composition with the correction. The words in parenthesis have some problems in the paragraph.
ReplyDeletehi teacher.
ReplyDelete(So) At this moment I don´t know what I will BE in the future, but I think about this all the time. I was thinking about journalism, but I AM NOT SURE. (don´t have certainly.) I think (too,) that I will be a scientist , TOO. it´s so hard, but not impossible, I dream so much, well this is my big dream.
I listen TO many peoples about the future
and I don´t have a conclusion.
When I (i) was 7 I thought I WAS GOING TO (will) be an actor, but MY (may) tastes changed. I wanted to be an actor because I saw (the peoples)PEOPLE on TV and I wanted TO BE THERE, (stay) too.
This subject ABOUT (abour) the future is a topic that we have to think ABOUT VERY (so) much. The (the) future is one
part of the life, we have to prepare the future
in the present...
by luiz henrique
bye bye
November 10, 2009 12:20 PM
November 11, 2009 1:46 PM
All the children have a dream that when they grow up they want to be a professional. Some people want to be a teacher and others want to be a pilot, and I have wanted to be a doctor because I have thought it INTERESTING (interisting) and gratifying the helpful idea of helpING people. I want to FOLLOW a CAREER (carrer) that I LIKE (liked) because there are people that aren´t happy with THEIR (them) jobS and BECOME (became) frustrated people.
ReplyDeleteNovember 9, 2009 4:01 PM
Hello, Jennifer. Your paragraph is a little short. Attention to the train of thought. Thanks for the participation.
ReplyDeleteAs any person, I’m CONFUSED (confunsing) about what I (i) Will be. I think that In the beginning of careers which you want to follow is so difficult but this happens because, sometimes, a person DOESN´T (don’t) have ANY (none) idea about THEY WANT (wants) to be. For me It’s a little different because I dream I’ll be an actress, lawyer or a businesswoman. I try to search a lot of places THAT (who) can help me to understand more about THESE (this) professions but I don’t have (too) much time to search this because I study everyday and I get to have a time (need to have time) to do this. There are some things (which I think that it won’t leave to ?) , but other times I think that I can get it. But I believe that these are the careers that I want to follow and nothing can upset it. But I think that My head will change, cause I’ll learn a lot of new things that I’ll be able to be or not (to exercise).
ReplyDeleteSo, I just wanted to say this
Bye :)
November 9, 2009 1:25 AM
Ok Shaynna, your composition is good. Exercise more often. The corrections are in capital letters. Some parts are a little difficult to understand.
ReplyDeletehi teacher!
ReplyDeletechoosing a career is very difficult, because the right ONE is closer than I think. (I don't know exactly the career that I can now think of many but not choose ( ? ). In my opinion people should not choose a career just for the salary (and not like) WITHOUT LIKING the career that THEY will follow, for this choice is for all your life. I want to pick a career that's something I enjoy and that doesn't have a lot of math, I finally have some time for me to decide.
julio cesar i5v5i315
November 7, 2009 4:53 AM
Hello, Julio, in parenthesis you have the mistakes and parts I didn´t understand at all. Try to be clearer. Thanks for the participation.
ReplyDeleteHi teacher.
ReplyDeleteI want to be an architect because it is a very interesting profession. I like math, geometry and design, and architecture is a course that CONSISTS OF (engobla) all these matters, so interesting.
If I WON´T BE ABLE TO (can not) pass the entrance exam for architecture, I plan to do journalism. As well as being my second choice, I also think IT IS a very interesting course.
Kisses, Camila I5V5I315
November 6, 2009 7:46 AM
Hi Camila. Nice job. You can write more. The corrections are in capital letters, ok.
ReplyDeleteThanks.
Hi teacher
ReplyDeleteI have problems in CHOOSING (choose) my career because I want one career that is nice but I have many opinion (?). but this moment I need TO choose fast because I will do the Pas and I need to decide.
(But) I think ABOUT (in) doING LANGUAGES (letters in English) because I want TO master this language that I have A LOT OF (many) difficult in learnING. (also I don’t like this language so I don’t if I’ll fallow this profession (?)). I think ABOUT studying ENGLISH (letters in English) to work as a translator because it’s very interesting but all this is for me TO improve my English.
November 6, 2009 7:39 AM
Hello, Emmanuel,Thanks for the participation.
ReplyDeleteAttention to corrections in parentheses. Try to write more clearly.
Hi teacher!
ReplyDeleteI have ALREADY (alredy) chosen (the) my professional life and It's very difficulty to choose, futhermore (?) the life giveS me a lot of opportunity.
When I was a child I likeD to play soccer but my mon put me to practice Taekwando. However I didn't like to practice IT very much. My big passion was soccer soon I changed my mind because, It's very difFicult (y) to be a SOCCER player. So I chose to learn English, finishing my (course of) computer COURSE and to do University Entrace Exam. One day I would like to teach Taekwando for children (s), this is my hobbi.
November 6, 2009 3:40 AM
Gabriel, my dear student. It´s not necessary to post the paragraph in Portuguese, ok? Attention to the corrections in capitals.
ReplyDeleteHello teacher!
ReplyDeleteI'm sorry but I don't have any idea about what I'm going to do when I finish high school. I'm an INDECISIVE (undecided) girl.
When I was a child, I had decided to do something like teachING, singING and dancING, I wanted to be a policewoman or firefighter and pilot of motocycle, but my mother talked me out of it.
Nowadays I DON´T (didn't) like to teach, dance, sing or want to be a policewoman or firefighter, cause I grew up and my tastes changed, but pilot of motocycle I want to be, although my mother desagree with me.
I have many ABILITIES (habilits) : I like to take photos of (the) people, animals and LANDSCAPES (the paradises), I like to make videos, to listen To music and travel. I'd like to learn TO play (ing) the guitar or another instrument.
I don't know exactly what is the BEST (better) for me. For example, I'd like to do medicine(pediatrics or obstetrics) cause I like children (s), veterinary, medicinE, biology, psychology, or tourism. I'm afraid to make the wrong choice.
Find and choose a career is dificult, but I know how this is important for my future, however, I'm confused!
Jéssica Nogueira
Hello, Jessica
ReplyDeleteVery good composition. Attention to the corrections in capitals.
Choosing a profession is not easy, it takes great responsibility (to) not TO waste time and money.
ReplyDeleteI always wanted to be a psychologist, because I like to listen to people and be able to help them. Understanding a little about human behavior would do me good.
Despite (ease of)I GET mathS WITH EASE, I do not like numbers, in my aptitude tests results are always human sciences.
I want to go abroad to learn more English and do some specialty courses, perhaps I live it for some time to gain (esperinecia) professional EXPERIENCE (goals).
Ana Claudia I5V5I315
November 4, 2009 3:41 PM
Ana Claudia, thanks for the participation.
ReplyDeleteHello, Professor!!
ReplyDeleteThis lesson is going to be so easy for me, because in every moment of my life I'm thinking (in) ABOUT my LIFE, every time, even (I'm) in the present, I think (in) OF my future! I had already decided my GRADUATION COURSE (graduate) when I saw this video.
In the last two weeks I was very worried and confused about my career, my field, my tastes, if I am GOING TO (gonna) be very happy or simply SATISFIED (satisfacted) with myself, so I had started to pray, to ask the God's decision (since 2007, I´VE always beEN very anxious), I knew what God decided (in my life) I would meet IN MY LIFE. And I was very confused about two GRADUATION COURSES (graduates): Medicine or Music! Music: because I love (so much) music VERY MUCH, I play keyboardS and it's generally present in my life! And Medicine - Pediatrics, First: because it gives money! Second: because I enjoy laboratories, formulas, Math, help others, CHEMISTRY (chemical), I love children and I want to make the difference tHrough my occupation. I had already researched other occupations and most of them I had disagreed WITH (given?). I don't like (to) law, even design or teachING! And I continued to pray, then one week before that video's class I had a dream where God sent to me... To Be A DOCTOR!! I woke up scared but not afraid I could not beliEve that God was speaking to me in dream, that way, and if it were true? And IF it was only God? And if it was just a dream? When I woke up I started to pray again and I felt a calmness that I had never felt BEFORE (yet)!! And IT continues, continues... And nowadays I ('m fell) FEEL very sure about my future, my career, my tastes, and I am not the same! Now I know that Medicine is the BEST (better) for my life, so the video will not help me because I am sure!! But this movie made me (a reflection) THINK again, because it is very good, it helps and clears the vision (the) all of us have about the future, money and occupation!
November 4, 2009 8:51 AM
ALINE
ReplyDeleteI (i) am sorry (i) I couldN´T write before.
Choosing a career is very difficult but I had already decided my GRADUATION COURSE. I will do international affairs school. I want to work sitting on desk. I like to read, write and resolve problems. Well this is my big dream. I Know it is very hard. I need to study a lot. And I will have one way. I will work to government
(I was 15 year old.?) I was going to be teacher, but it’s hard to make a living as A teacher
I (i) like teachING adultS How to read. I should have applied to teachING school. I could be happy
Maybe it is not too late(r). I (i) think I (i) will be able to GO TO (make) teachING school after international affairs school.
OK Aline, your composition is here. Attention to the corrections. Some parts are unclear.
November 20, 2009 5:11 AM
JÉSSICA GABRIELA
For me it's very important the CHOICE OF (choose about) profession because it's a CHOICE (choose) FOR (to) all the life. When A (the) person MAKE (made) the CHOICE choose OF (about) a profession she OR HE has TO (that) to strive VERY much to be a good professional and give the BEST better AS (how) A professional. Then I want (a) TO work WITH SOMETHING (of a thing) that I like,I was going to study social comunication but I changeD my mind because I don't have the necessary characteristic to that. Now I think ABOUT GOING TO (study) LAW (lawyer) school because I want TO be a judge, it's good because the salary is high (t) , it's a important professional and I want TO work with justice,but it's a difficult(y) work and dangerous too.
Jéssica, although you´re late, you´re composition is here. Attention to corrections.